FIC: I don't want you (to smile to anybody) NC-17

[mizzy2k.livejournal.com]

(I'm so nervous posting here! I know you're all lovely but this is sort of terrifying tooo. Have I done it right? /flails)

Title: I don't want you (to smile to anybody)
Rating: NC-17
Genre: PWP, angst/romance
Wordcount: 31542
Warnings: Pining, PWP. Slight RPF moment.
Author: mizzy2k
Notes: Slight crossover with Push, no previous knowledge necessary. 
Summary: Tony Stark doesn’t do commitment. So Steve finds it weird – but not impossible – to deal with Tony suddenly bringing home dates that look like him. Until one of Tony’s one-night-stands, who could be a double for Steve, turns out to be not quite as disposable as the rest of Tony’s conquests – and Steve’s repressed crush on Tony starts to become problematic...

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Comments

[tresmaxwell.livejournal.com]

So I want to know where my morning went. It was early, I was going to go out and run errands, and then I opened this and now it's like one >_> I BLAME you.

It's absolutely lovely. I was literally laughing out loud at some parts, especially at the way the team interacted with each other. You wrote them so well. And the absolutely amusing play on all the Cris Evans characters, thumbs up. When they were sitting on the stairs talking about Tony doing something stupid, I'm pretty sure I was leaning towards the screen trying to shove them together with my brain. Clearly that didn't work. <3

There was a smattering of British-isms throughout that made me quirk my head when they came out of Captain America's mouth, but that's okay. Trust me, it didn't ruin it. Though I was a little curious as to why you picked a dragon? Where did it come from?! Did somebody make it? I'm over thinking this, I know.

What I really wanted to say is thank you and I loved it.

[mizzy2k.livejournal.com]

Oh, man. I have the loveliest beta in the world, but as we're both British- yeah. I'm super glad it didn't ruin it, ahhh. Need to find me an American beta! Is there a beta finding post in this comm? Or a beta finding comm? I feel like such a ridiculous newbie even though I've been stalking the comm for a long while.

I was going to pick a robot, and then my brain went, who would make a robot and I had Hammer making an apocalyptic television in my last S/T fic and. yeah. um. dragon. too much Dark Avengers maybe?

[tresmaxwell.livejournal.com]

Um, I don't know about betas, I've only been on this forum since this morning <_<. I joined to throw my fics at people. I wouldn't mind betaing your stuff, I'd say I'm a pretty good editor since I've actually had classes on it (seriously not trying to brag, because it's taken me a long time to get there). And I'm a Texas girl, so I could point out what Captain America shouldn't say ^_^ But it really was fine, the rest of the fic was too good to care. You can write tension incredibly well. I'm not usually so absorbed in stories that I forget what I was supposed to be doing. LOL, it's cool. A dragon is just a smidge cliche which was the only reason it stuck out to me. It didn't matter much, it was just the fuel to the Steve/Tony flame (pun totally intended, slap me if you want). They do handle a lot of robots too, so it was kind of nice to see something different. Also, I need to read about Hammer's apocalyptic television...

[tresmaxwell.livejournal.com]

Also, how come LJ took the formatting out of my comment... >_> WTF

[mizzy2k.livejournal.com]

Supervillains. Supervillains. They're behind EVERYTHING.

[tresmaxwell.livejournal.com]

LMAO! They are, aren't they?

[mizzy2k.livejournal.com]

Well, apologies for the probable British-isms: http://archiveofourown.org/works/401626

AND I WOULD LOVE YOU TO BETA FOR ME THAT WOULD BE AWESOME. I take criticism super well, I think? (One exception: last week I got a huuuuuuuuuge review- to nitpick one spelling- and my brain broke down. But otherwise, I take criticism super well. I'm sort of had training for that, anyway!)

[tresmaxwell.livejournal.com]

I don't criticize, at least I try not to. The only way for people to improve without feeling like they're the worst writer in the world (I've had bad critics, I've been there) is to give constructive feedback. If I think something doesn't work, I'll explain why and make suggestions for improvement. Being that it is YOUR fic, you can choose whether or not you want to take my advice.

And really, the British-isms are expected if you're British. I shudder to think of me trying to write a Sherlock fiction without throwing out more Americanisms than dialog. Maybe if I have a British character one day, you can help me make him more realistic :D

[mizzy2k.livejournal.com]

Concrit, that's what I can take. Yeah. Always forget the distinction. (There are some people who can't even take that and you have to tread on eggshells and holy awkward, batman. Wait. Is it rude to make a DC reference in a marvel comm I AM SO SORRY.)

I would be very happy to britpick anything for you. <3 ESPECIALLY if it's Sherlock. <3

[tresmaxwell.livejournal.com]

There's a huge difference. You have to be open to people trying to help you improve, but harsh criticism that doesn't have an ounce of positive feedback is hard for anyone to hear. I don't think it's rude >_> They're all superheroes. I could be wrong though. NANANAnananaNANANA, BATMAN!!!! There, I've done it too.

I adore Sherlock. I mostly read the Sherlock stories because I've been a little too shy about trying to write one. Mostly for the Americanisms. Right now my soul belongs to Marvel, but maybe later :D